[BostonCard]

Alternatives would be to change to the passive voice "As a valued supporter of Stanford Athletics, you are invited to join an exclusive virtual event..." or to not highlight the pitch that the recipient is a valued supporter "We are excited to invite you, a valued supporter of Stanford Athletics, to join a virtual event..."

It grates because it kind of tries to make the object (you) into the subject "As a valued supporter of Stanford Athletics"

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[BostonCard]

Alternatives would be to change to the passive voice "As a valued supporter of Stanford Athletics, you are invited to join an exclusive virtual event..." or to not highlight the pitch that the recipient is a valued supporter "We are excited to invite you, a valued supporter of Stanford Athletics, to join a virtual event..."

It grates because it kind of tries to make the object (you) into the subject "As a valued supporter of Stanford Athletics"

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